The Sun Rose redux

The song ‘The Sun Rose’ can be beautifully sung.
It plays well with my dry chrysanthemums,

Which are the very epitome of a chant,
Even my water lilies like to hum along.
As the visitors look at the gardens
they pause to look at the flowers.


They paused to look at the flowers.
Because they are here to revive the earth
They need a song to sing.
As the shadows return
To an earth of delicate surmise,
The sun rose and the garden beaconed.

(this is a new version of the poem of the Sun Rose that i posted a few weeks ago. it just keeps shape shifting in my mind…)

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One thought on “The Sun Rose redux

  1. Hi Jim I enjoyed reading this and also I enjoyed comparing the new version with your previous one. It seems that the active role has been transferred from the mysterious ‘shadows’ to ‘visitors’ and with that I get the feeling the poem has moved closer to realism, slightly away from shall we say the supernatural. I like this change. A further change is that it is now the flowers that need that song, because they revive the Earth. And I like that too. There is great charm in these lines. I hope you’re staying well. All the best, John

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