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July 15, 2012

A poem set to words—
Wind in a swallow’s wings, my
Throat full of footprints.

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5 Responses to “[ 4 ]”

  1. John Stevens Says:

    Oh brilliant Jim!
    Wonderful opening line with that teasing reversal of the norm: a poem is set to music, or music is set to words, but here the ‘poem’ is found – found up in the sky and then set to words.
    And then all that exuberance: we read it into the swallow’s flight, soaring and swooping; we find it in our response shouting out with surprise and pleasure until our throats are hoarse.
    Also, the suggestion of ‘footprints’ in the throat just serves to underscore our earthbound state in comparison with this bird.
    Finally: it’s beautiful, it’s uplifting, and you’ve packed a surprise into every one of the three lines.
    What a wonderful read!

  2. Tom D'Evelyn Says:

    Neatly turned! Yet mindful too, the two aspects of the independent line amplified in the two-line section, and not only that, but sequenced toward something equivocal but not merely clever, somehow the sound of the song reaches us, as if communicating something of our own pedestrian, literal world. So the poem tests or weighs the implications of the compact cliche exploding theme, and in so doing, goes a ways to discovering the plural senses almost occluded by the force of wit. We follow the inner form never losing sight of the enduring question: what is poetry?

  3. extrasimile Says:

    Thank you, thank you and thank you. Imagine, I actually wrote something everybody seems to like and understand. I’ll have to watch my step.
    It’s interesting, Tom, isn’t it, that we seem ever farther, from—not only answering—but even understanding that question.
    What is poetry?

  4. Tom D'Evelyn Says:

    But we know it when we hear it!

  5. Thomas Davis Says:

    I love this, Jim. I’m not sure what to say that John has not already said, so I’ll applaud with silence.


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