5 – 7 – 5 [ the Haiku ]

Initiated,
The haiku is like an  egg,
Inseminated.

Published by extrasimile

define: extra: excess, more than is needed, required or desired; something additional of the same kind. define: simile: a simile is a type of figurative language, language that does not mean exactly what it says, that makes a comparison between two otherwise unalike objects or ideas by connecting them with the words “like” or “as.” The reader can see a similar connection with the verbs resemble, compare and liken. Similes allow an author to emphasize a certain characteristic of an object by comparing that object to an unrelated object that is an example of that characteristic. define: extra: an minor actor in a crowd scene

6 thoughts on “5 – 7 – 5 [ the Haiku ]

  1. I certainly do not object. They go together like bacon and eggs (as it were). I just put a version of ‘The Haiku’ with a picture of an egg up. Feel free to use it if you think it works better. Also note the change to capital letters. ‘Jeremiah’ is quite nice. I wonder if you are familiar with the Freddy the Pig books by Walter Brooks. They were a big part of my life when I was ten or so. Freddy and the other animals on the Bean farm would go on adventures. Freddy was, among other things, a poet. (And there is a book of poems other there to prove it.)The rooster’s name was Charles. I rather doubt if there was anything I’ve read since then that had so much influence on my life.
    And, oh, there are two ‘Freddy’ poems that I wrote some time ago. https://extrasimile.wordpress.com/2011/03/04/freddy-an-unguarded-moment/
    https://extrasimile.wordpress.com/2011/03/07/freddy-goes-to-florida/
    The first one is closer to the spirit of the books; in the second I get too clever.

  2. Thanks, John. I was thinking that since I had named the previous one 5 – 7 – 5 as a way of having my haiku cake and eating it too, it might be fun to try a haiku called ‘Haiku’. This one sort of hatched itself.

  3. Oh, this is very clever, Jim!
    An egg is a little thing, perfectly and symmetrically shaped, isn’t it? And it is not always inseminated. But when it is … what a future! So, an unbeatable metaphor for the haiku.
    And on top of that, you have really polished the smooth symmetrical shape of this one, with those single, 5-syllable rhyming words either side of the central line which contains the yolk.
    Applause!! Standing ovation!!

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