One of the Persimmons

If you will forgive me, sir…
I ate one the persimmons.
There were six, but one
was bruised and I knew you wanted
the picture to be a balance
of brush strokes
and paint and persimmon.
Like Mu Qi. I know you think perfection
is an illusion found in art alone, but…

It could have been a wormhole
sir, that persimmon, past death,
so delicious, so cold.

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define: extra: excess, more than is needed, required or desired; something additional of the same kind. define: simile: a simile is a type of figurative language, language that does not mean exactly what it says, that makes a comparison between two otherwise unalike objects or ideas by connecting them with the words “like” or “as.” The reader can see a similar connection with the verbs resemble, compare and liken. Similes allow an author to emphasize a certain characteristic of an object by comparing that object to an unrelated object that is an example of that characteristic. define: extra: an minor actor in a crowd scene

One thought on “One of the Persimmons

  1. Congratulations Jim, and thank you for thinking about my suggestion. I like this a lot and I think the pruning worked well – the spare lines are true to the painting – and to WCW’s poem too. One particular success is that blank line before the image of the wormhole – very cute! Another is the new closing line of course!
    I hope you don’t feel dissatisfied with the result.

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